Tuesday, April 13, 2010

There are plenty of video games. They are all based on different things. They can come from a variety of categories such as sports, to shooting everything you see. Late at night, if you are playing a game, you will have to turn the volume low or else you might wake up your parents. Unfortunately, you may get yelled at.
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2 comments:

  1. Trigger-Didi101April 13, 2010 at 11:50 AM

    The everything you see part, it doesent really benifit the paragraph. After the first sentence there should be a comma then start it off with Based.

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  2. Movie BusterApril 13, 2010 at 11:58 AM

    You did help make the sentances short that's good, but's that basically all you really did through

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